C. Michael Pilato wrote:
>> <para>While it won't be the most commonly used tool at the
>> administrator's disposal, <command>svndumpfilter</command>
>> provides a very particular brand of useful
>> functionality—the ability to quickly and easily modify
>>- that dumpfile data by acting as a path-based filter. Simply
>>+ that dump file data by acting as a path-based filter. Simply
>
> This should just read "that dump data".
OK - that is better.
>> <para>To get these three projects into their own repositories,
>>- we first make a dumpfile of the whole repository:</para>
>>+ we first make a dump file of the whole repository:</para>
>
> "we first dump the whole repository:..."
Good. Thanks.
>> as <quote>viewed from 10,000 feet</quote>. For each section, we
>>- provide backreferences to relevant chapters when
>>+ provide back-references to relevant chapters when
>> possible.</para>
>
> The correct form of this particular compound word lacks the hyphen.
OK. I was just working from gut feeling and the fact that it wasn't in
my Ispell dictionary - but then nor are lots of other words. I accept
that and will omit this change.
> But I'm not fond of the sentence at all. How about:
>
> "When other locations in this book contain relevant detailed
> information, sections will refer to those locations."
>
> Or something of the sort.
Hmm... well, I don't mind if you want to change it to something vaguely
of that sort sometime, but I don't mind it how it is either.
MBK, is this OK with these changes? cmpilato seems to have picked up
the non-straightforward usages that you were concerned about. The only
remaining ugly one that I can see is: "A program for filtering
Subversion repository dump file format streams." But I don't think it's
noticeably worse expanded like that than it was contracted, so any
improvement can be a separate fix.
- Julian
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Received on Fri Oct 22 01:55:10 2004